Criticism
-The flow of the story is repetitive
-We shouldnt do the same thing over and over again
-Stay away from repeating what goes on
-Show what the main character has overcome
-We havent properly developed our idea
Improvements/good points-
Improvements/good points-
-Story goes on for 2days
-Flows well
-Talk to the boy we are making the film about
-Get ideas of not being confident
-Phone rings, he replies "not coming out"
-Friend knocking at his door/frightend to get out of bed/knock at the door and noone comes out
-Seems rushed/jumped points
-Show more of a lack of confidence
-Maybe scared to get out of bed?
-We need to set it up properly
-Steer clear of the stereotypical bullying theme
-Put yourself in his position
-Be more creative!!!
-Make it more realistic
-Make more of a fuss over the boy
-Make much more of a fuss of the girl he saved.
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